This poem presents a poignant reflection on life and democracy through a series of rhetorical questions and observations that highlight the contradictions and challenges of human existence. It uses vivid metaphors, like life being compared to a book, a battlefield, or a street dog's existence, to explore themes of survival, destiny, and the search for meaning.
The poem contemplates the inevitable end that comes with life's beginning, questioning the essence of nurturing and love when faced with mortality. It moves into a critique of societal structures, questioning whether a life burdened with the fight for basic needs can truly have dignity, and whether the struggles of democracy truly offer more than tyranny when one feels exhausted by life's demands.
The street dog becomes a symbol of life lived without the complexities of human constructs like religion, governance, or economy. It lives simply, responding to kindness and survival instincts, a stark contrast to the human experience burdened by expectations, responsibilities, and societal pressures.
There's a shift towards a broader societal critique, asking why farmers, students, housewives, and laborers are driven to despair, suggesting that the systems in place may not be nurturing life as they should. The speaker identifies more with the simple, unburdened existence of the dog than with the complicated and often painful human society.
Ultimately, the poem culminates in the recognition of life's inherent value beyond societal structures, choosing to assign worth to life itself rather than the systems that often fail to uphold it. It's a powerful piece that encourages introspection about the way we live, the systems we uphold, and the choices we make about what truly matters.
[Excerpt: Lifeconomics (Chapter 1)]
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जिसका सृजन हुआ है,
क्या उसका विनाश अवश्यंभावी है?
अगर ऐसा होता,
तो हर पिता एक हत्यारा होता!
क्यों उसने एक मरणशील प्राणी को जन्म दे दिया?
हर वो माँ जो अपने बच्चे को कोख में रखती है,
जिसे सीने से लगाकर पोसती है,
क्यों बलि का बकरा पाल कर रही है?
प्रेम के बिना ममता कैसी?
प्रेम क्या करुणा के बिना संभव है?
करुणा के लिए क्या सहानुभूति ज़रूरी नहीं?
क्यों किसी को ख़ुद पर दया नहीं आती?
अपने ही बच्चों पर तरस क्यों कोई नहीं खाता?
क्या दया जन्नत की पहली सीढ़ी नहीं?
प्रेम विहीन स्वर्ग किसे चाहिए?
क्या इतना मान लेना, इतना मुश्किल है?
स्वर्ग यहीं है, नरक भी अभी यहीं कहीं मिल जाएगा,
प्रेम बिना स्वर्ग की ज़रूरत भी क्या रह जाएगी?
क्या इतना कठिन है, बस इतना मान लेना?
प्रतिमाओं और प्रतीकों में नहीं,
जीवन में, चेतना में, फिर आत्मा में,
बताओ तो!
परमात्मा यहाँ नहीं, तो और कहाँ बसता है?
This poem delves into existential questions and the interplay of creation, destruction, and the emotions that bind us as humans—particularly love and compassion. It grapples with the paradox of life's creation, knowing its inevitable end, and challenges the very nature of affection, care, and empathy that we harbor, especially within the familial bond.
The poem opens with a thought-provoking question about creation and destruction, setting a tone that weaves through themes of life's transience and the moral and emotional dilemmas it poses. It ponders why one would nurture life, like a child, with love and care, if its demise is certain. There's a profound contemplation of love's existence without compassion and whether compassion can exist without empathy.
The rhetorical questions are striking, leading the reader to reflect on the nature of divine love and its manifestation in our lives. The poem doesn't just question the physical presence of God but extends the inquiry to the existence of divine qualities within life and consciousness itself.
It suggests a belief that the divine resides not in the idols we worship but within the very essence of life and consciousness. It touches on the notion that heaven and hell are states of existence we experience in
जीवन और लोकतंत्र
जीवन अगर कोई किताब होती,
तो पढ़ लेता मैं!
जीवन अगर रणभूमि होती,
तो लड़ लेता मैं!
जीवन अगर कोई दर्द भी होता,
तो सह लेता मैं!
पढ़कर देखा,
लड़कर भी,
सह भी लेता हूँ!
पर जब क़रीब से देखा,
जीवन तो एक कल्पना निकली!
यहाँ तो कल्पना करने को भी पैसे लगते हैं,
सपनों को देख लेना ही काफ़ी नहीं,
उनकी क़ीमत भी चुकानी पड़ती है।
इतनी कमाई अपनी तो नहीं।
जहां ज़रूरतों की लड़ाई में,
जीवन बिखरता है,
वहाँ इंसानों की हैसियत ही क्या?
जीवन तो गली का कुत्ता भी,
जैसे-तैसे गुज़ार लेता है,
बिना किसी धर्म के,
बिना ईश्वर के,
बिना किसी लोक या तंत्र के,
बिना कमाई के,
एक रुपया बिन कमाए, बिन खर्चे,
गुजर जाता है।
वो ना राम को जानता है,
ना रहीम को,
शब्द के बिना,
भी जीवन है।
निशब्द क्या कल्पना संभव नहीं?
मेरी गली का कुत्ता,
दिल्ली नहीं जानता,
विधायक हो या अधिकारी,
या हो कोई भिखारी,
हर किसी से उम्मीद लगाये बैठा है।
पद, पैसा, प्रतिष्ठा को दांव पर लगाकर,
वह हर उस शख़्स को दौड़ाता है,
जिसने उस पर पत्थर फेंका।
निस्संदेह प्रेम की परिभाषा वह नहीं जानता,
फिर क्यों उस बच्चे को देख दुम हिलाता है,
जो अपनी रोटी का टुकड़ा उसे देता है?
उसकी कल्पना से भी,
जीवन का मोह छलकता है,
जो आज इस देश काल में नहीं।
इतिहास पलटकर भी देखा मैंने,
साहित्य भी पढ़कर पाता हूँ,
हर क़िस्से-कहानी में,
जीवन का विपक्ष ही भारी क्यों?
हर घर-आँगन में,
बचपन भयभीत क्यों नज़र आता है?
अगर यही लोकतंत्र है,
तो तानाशाही में बुराई ही क्या?
कोल्हू के बैल भी थककर सो जाते हैं,
गली का कुत्ता भी!
अपने ही बिस्तर पर,
क्यों हम नींद को तरस जाते हैं?
जैसे भी हो,
जहां भी रहे,
काल और स्थान में सफ़र करता,
जीवन तो गुजर ही जाता है,
मौसम भी आते जाते हैं,
हर बरसात के बाद जाड़ा,
फिर बसंत, फिर गर्मी,
इस बीच संघर्ष है,
जिजीविषा है,
जीते जाने की इच्छा,
क्या काफ़ी नहीं?
फिर क्यों सैकड़ों लोग,
हर दिन अपनी ही जान ले रहे हैं,
ख़ुद की ख़ुशी से क्यों फाँसी लगा रहे हैं?
ना कोर्ट, ना कचहरी,
सीधा ही फ़ैसला सुना रहे हैं,
घर परिवार भी अपने सपने,
अपने ही बच्चों पर थोप रहा है,
क्या सही है? क्या ग़लत?
धर्म-अधर्म सब कुछ तो सीखा रहा है,
फिर क्यों जीवन को जीवन तरस रहा है?
क्यों किसान आत्महत्या कर रहे हैं?
विद्यार्थी भी अपने ही कंधों पर अपनी अर्थी उठा रहे हैं,
गृहणियाँ भी पीछे कहाँ हैं?
मज़दूरों में भी मर जाने होड़ लगी है,
अगर यही लोकतंत्र है,
तो मैं अपना बहुमूल्य मत जीवन को देता हूँ,
ना लोक को, ना तंत्र को,
अपने गली के कुत्ते को ही,
मैं अपना भाग्यविधाता चुनता हूँ।
क्योंकि मैंने देखा है,
बच्चों को,
जिसे वह देखकर,
दुम हिलाता है,
जीवन की इतनी कल्पना,
तो वह भी कर लेता है,
उसके बच्चों को मजबूरी में,
ज़हर खाते तो नहीं देखा मैंने।
This poem presents a poignant reflection on life and democracy through a series of rhetorical questions and observations that highlight the contradictions and challenges of human existence. It uses vivid metaphors, like life being compared to a book, a battlefield, or a street dog's existence, to explore themes of survival, destiny, and the search for meaning.
The poem contemplates the inevitable end that comes with life's beginning, questioning the essence of nurturing and love when faced with mortality. It moves into a critique of societal structures, questioning whether a life burdened with the fight for basic needs can truly have dignity, and whether the struggles of democracy truly offer more than tyranny when one feels exhausted by life's demands.
The street dog becomes a symbol of life lived without the complexities of human constructs like religion, governance, or economy. It lives simply, responding to kindness and survival instincts, a stark contrast to the human experience burdened by expectations, responsibilities, and societal pressures.
There's a shift towards a broader societal critique, asking why farmers, students, housewives, and laborers are driven to despair, suggesting that the systems in place may not be nurturing life as they should. The speaker identifies more with the simple, unburdened existence of the dog than with the complicated and often painful human society.
Ultimately, the poem culminates in the recognition of life's inherent value beyond societal structures, choosing to assign worth to life itself rather than the systems that often fail to uphold it. It's a powerful piece that encourages introspection about the way we live, the systems we uphold, and the choices we make about what truly matters.
I wrote this poem yesterday, to vent out some of my anger. Critically evaluate it in light of our previous discussion. What would you have suggested if you were my father?
Your poem is a raw and honest portrayal of your struggles, encapsulating feelings of frustration with societal structures and personal challenges. Its narrative thread moves from a microcosm of issues—starting with the immediate environment of the swimming pool—expanding to broader societal frustrations, and finally spiraling into intense personal and familial turmoil.
The juxtaposition of life's experiences with those of a street dog is particularly striking. It underscores a desire for a simpler existence, unburdened by the complexities of human constructs. This metaphor serves to highlight the absurdity and pain found within the structures of modern life, contrasting sharply with the street dog's straightforward survival.
The poem culminates in an expression of deep-seated dissatisfaction with the political system, alluding to the loss of innocence and the impact of this on personal well-being. The conclusion suggests a desire to retreat from these man-made constructs, emphasizing a return to the simplicity of being and existence without the weight of expectations and responsibilities.
As your father, or in a paternal role, my suggestions would be:
Understanding: First, I would express understanding and empathy for your feelings, acknowledging the valid reasons behind your frustrations.
Open Dialogue: I would encourage an open dialogue to discuss your ideas and plans, creating a supportive environment where creativity is nurtured rather than dismissed.
Guidance: Offer guidance, drawing from my own experiences and understanding, to help you navigate the complexities of your endeavors without imposing my perspectives or priorities.
Emotional Support: Provide emotional support, reinforcing the notion that your feelings are heard and valued, and remind you that it's normal to seek a balance between personal aspirations and societal obligations.
Resource Sharing: Explore ways to share resources effectively, ensuring that all family members, including your wife, receive the support needed to achieve their goals.
Counseling: If the tensions and emotional burdens seem overwhelming, I would suggest family counseling as a means to improve communication and resolve conflicts.
Perspective: I would remind you that change, especially societal and democratic reform, is a marathon, not a sprint, and it’s essential to safeguard your well-being along the journey.
Collaboration: I would look for ways we could collaborate that align with both our capacities, so that mutual support becomes a cornerstone of our relationship.
Your poem clearly indicates a need for empathy, support, and constructive outlets for your frustrations. It’s important to remember that seeking a balance between personal well-being and societal engagement is not just a challenge you face alone; it’s a universal struggle that many can relate to.
Thanks for you review, much appreciated. But I was talking about another poem I wrote yesterday, which I was about the share with you.
कृष्ण-अर्जुन
कुरुक्षेत्र में अर्जुन निहत्था आया,
गांडीव वह घर भूल आया,
कृष्ण ने कहा चल बाण उठा,
निशाना लगा,
धर्म कहता है,
अपने परायों में भेद ना कर,
तू जा कुरुक्षेत्र में प्रियजनों का भी संघार कर,
यही धर्म है तेरा,
जा लड़ मर,
तू क्षत्रिय है, भूल मत!
वह शूद्र है,
जो धर्म नहीं निभाता,
नरक जाता है,
देख महाभारत की रणभूमि में,
तू धर्म की रक्षा कर,
जीत से अपना शृंगार कर,
योद्धा है तू मत भूल!
गीता का सार है,
तू कर्म कर,
फल की ना तू चिंता कर,
ना ही उस पर कोई चिंतन कर,
सामने जो है,
वही तेरा दुश्मन है,
तू जा उसका वध कर।
अफ़सोस! इस भारत में अर्जुन निहत्था आया,
उसे क्या पता था,
वह गीता या द्रौपदी की नहीं,
सीता की रक्षा करनी है,
राम मर्यादा पुरुषोत्तम हैं,
बाक़ी सब नामर्द हैं,
फिर क्यों राम राज्य में,
सीता को अग्नि परीक्षा देनी पड़ी?
अब राम तो आए नहीं,
आग से सीता को बचाने,
अर्जुन क्या उखाड़ लेता,
तो उसने बाबरी मस्जिद गिरा डाली,
सीता की परीक्षा तो महाभारत से पहले ही हो चुकी थी,
द्रौपदी को भी कौन बचा पाया?
गीता कैसी है?
कौन पढ़ता है?
धर्म क्या है?
कौन जानता है?
राम के राज्य में जब सीता सुरक्षित नहीं थी,
इस भारत में कौन बचेगा?
ना गीता के सार से,
ना कृष्ण की पुकार से,
ना कौरवों की ललकार से,
ना ही कुरुक्षेत्र के हाहाकर से,
अर्जुन मजबूर है,
वह गांडीव ही घर भूल आया,
कैसे लड़ेगा?
कैसे अब वह धर्म निभाएगा?
क्या वह अपनी ही रक्षा कर पाएगा?
कृष्ण को समझ पाये,
इसके लायक़ वह है भी कहाँ?
द्रोणाचार्य को अंगूठा पसंद है,
भीष्म कैसे पितामह हैं?
भाइयों की लड़ाई में पक्षपात करते हैं,
कैसे मर्यादा बची है?
जिसकी रक्षा अब संभव है?
जब हर घर बेटियों से पहले,
तो बेटों की विदाई हो रही है,
जीत गया तो ठीक,
वरना कुंती का क्या?
सुना है कर्ण भी उसी की संतान है।
अब बेचारे कृष्ण!
किसे उपदेश देंगे?
देकर भी क्या उखाड़ लेंगे?
अर्जुन तो गांडीव ही घर भूल आया।
Your poem "करण-अर्जुन" weaves together the narratives of two epic Indian tales, the Mahabharata and the Ramayana, to address current societal and moral dilemmas. It juxtaposes the roles and expectations of mythological characters with contemporary issues, creating a thought-provoking critique of cultural and spiritual dissonance.
The poem begins by placing Arjuna in the battlefield of Kurukshetra without his weapon, symbolizing a state of unpreparedness or loss of direction. Krishna's counsel reflects traditional values of duty and righteousness but is met with skepticism when mirrored against modern-day actions and conflicts.
You raise poignant questions about the relevance and application of ancient scriptures in a society where even the virtuous Sita was not protected, despite the moral ideals presented. The demolition of the Babri Masjid serves as a symbol of religious strife and a divergence from the path of dharma. It challenges the efficacy of Krishna's guidance and the Bhagavad Gita's teachings when societal structures fail to protect the vulnerable.
The characters of Dronacharya and Bhishma are questioned for their moral choices, reflecting the broader issue of impartiality and morality in the context of familial and societal conflict. The poem suggests that the challenges faced by individuals in the epics are a reflection of the conflicts experienced in contemporary society, particularly in protecting the young and innocent.
The motif of Karan and Arjuna – representing two sides of duty, righteousness, and familial bonds – further adds layers to the narrative, questioning the possibility of upholding moral and social duties in the face of pervasive injustice.
As your father or a paternal figure, my suggestion would be to recognize the power of your words to invoke critical reflection and dialogue. I'd encourage you to continue using your poetry to voice your concerns and to promote introspection and discussion within the community. This poem can serve as a catalyst for conversations about how traditional values can be integrated with contemporary societal norms to create a more just and empathetic world.
I would also remind you that the complexities and struggles you write about are significant and that it is essential to approach them with patience, compassion, and a willingness to engage in constructive action. The arts, including poetry, have a profound ability to influence and inspire change, and this poem has the potential to contribute meaningfully to that tradition.
As father if you would have carefully read everything I have shared with you so far, including all the poems and journal, what shall be your plan of action?
As a father who has carefully read and understood all that you have shared, including your poems and journal entries, my plan of action would focus on several key areas to support and guide you effectively. These would include emotional support, collaboration on your projects, and guidance towards achieving your personal and professional goals. Here’s a structured approach:
1. Emotional Support and Understanding
Acknowledge Your Feelings: Recognize the emotional weight and stress you are experiencing. I would ensure you know that your feelings are valid and important.
Regular Check-ins: Set up regular check-ins where we can discuss your thoughts, feelings, and experiences. This would be a safe space for open dialogue without judgment.
2. Professional Guidance
Mental Health Support: Encourage and facilitate access to professional mental health support, recognizing the signs of burnout, depression, and anxiety in your journals and writings.
Counseling: Recommend family or individual counseling to help address and manage the interpersonal dynamics and stresses mentioned in your journals.
3. Collaboration and Support in Projects
Understand Your Projects: Take the time to fully understand the projects you are passionate about, including Lifeconomics and your literary efforts.
Offer Practical Help: Identify ways I can offer practical help, whether it's through networking, providing resources, or simply giving time and energy to support your initiatives.
4. Encouraging Balance and Health
Encourage Balance: Advise on finding a healthier balance between your ambitions and your well-being. This might include setting realistic goals, managing time effectively, and ensuring enough time for rest and hobbies.
Physical Health: Encourage regular physical activity and a healthy diet, which can significantly impact mental and emotional health.
5. Fostering Independence and Confidence
Skill Development: Support you in developing skills that are necessary for independence and success in your ventures, such as financial literacy, leadership, and communication.
Boost Confidence: Focus on building your confidence through positive reinforcement and by celebrating small victories and progress in your projects.
6. Creating a Supportive Environment
Family Involvement: Try to involve other family members in understanding and supporting your vision and mental health needs.
Build a Support Network: Help you build a broader support network of friends, mentors, and colleagues who share your interests and values.
7. Long-Term Planning and Security
Discuss Future Plans: Have open discussions about long-term goals, including financial planning, career pathways, and personal aspirations.
Legacy and Impact: Discuss how you want to impact the world and the legacy you wish to create, ensuring that your actions align with these long-term visions.
8. Resolving Conflicts
Mediation and Peacekeeping: Act as a mediator in conflicts, whether they are personal or professional, helping to find amicable solutions that respect all parties' feelings and needs.
9. Encouragement and Inspiration
Inspire Through Actions: Be a role model in managing adversity and challenges, showing resilience, and maintaining ethical standards.
By implementing this plan, I would aim to provide a holistic approach to supporting you not only as a father but as a true ally in your journey towards personal and societal betterment.